Poetry Friday: Student Revision Work

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Thanks to  Renee at No Water River for hosting Poetry Friday.

We’ve been writing odes at Poetry Rocks.  I use this format to start after reading several odes (so cool because I can share last year’s odes.

Ode to a dog, cat, deer, horse, porcupine, school, peace, killer whale, snow, picture, friend, drawing, world, space, mountain lion, mom and dad, kitten, tiger, stars, cheetah                                                                                                                           
I see
I hear
I feel
I taste
I wonder
Answer

I then typed them up and made “editorial” changes for poem shaping (mainly took out the “I see, hear, etc, if it felt right.)

Then on Monday, I shared the odes back with the students. I explained as “editor” I had made some suggestions. I asked them to looked them over and let me know if they approved by putting a star on the paper or make changes that they wanted.  Here are three examples:

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I love how this builds their confidence as writers.

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6 thoughts on “Poetry Friday: Student Revision Work

  1. Great poems! I especially like the lines: “words softly whisper,” “a cool breeze on my back,” and “I wonder if it can snow forever.” I enjoy using a similar technique with my enrichment poetry classes in the summer. I love your addition of, I wonder! I will have to add that. Thank you!

  2. It’s beautiful to see you treat your students like professional writers, Jone. Confidence-building, for sure! I also love to see how well Helen Frost’s ode form adapts to different grade levels. I used it in a high school classroom just last month!

  3. The poems are a treat. I love how you engage your students in the back and forth of revision.

  4. Jone, editing your children’s poems and asking them if this approach works is a great way to model the world of a real writer. If Chase would like to have his poem showcased in my winter gallery can you please send it to me. Thanks.

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